ext_25499 (![[identity profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/openid.png)
evangellie.livejournal.com) wrote in ![[community profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/community.png)
nuagedeau2011-01-06 12:42 am
evangellie.livejournal.com) wrote in nuagedeau2011-01-06 12:42 am
Entry tags:
Fic: unfinished bits (slight jaemin, yoomin)
Very short bits. Written in 2007. Not beta-ed. Will probably remain forever unfinished and that's why I'm posting them. (Also: taking requests)
Part of the![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
in_vazn's series: "Truth Hurts."
The day he had realised that he would die, really die, he hadn't had the courage to confront Jaejoong. He had lied to him. He had been a coward and he still was as he tried to lie to himself this time. It didn't work and each time he saw Jaejoong, he wanted to hold him and never let go. When he finally loosened his grip from the fabric of Jaejoong's coat -- he was joking about Changmin behaving like a kid -- he felt the precious seconds separating him from death fly away.
"Are you all right?" Yunho had stayed behind and was now looking at him with a concerned expression on his face.
"Yeah," responded Changmin, looking away.
"That was a no in Changminnie's language." Yunho sat down next to the bed. "What's on your mind?"
Changmin stared at his blanket, letting his fingers play with the fabric.
The beginning of an au for![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
simp_anna. I don't even remember where I wanted to go with this one...
0
Changmin's eyes had retained his tears when Yunho had told him about Yoochun's fate. For the first time in his long life, Changmin thought that God was unfair. But he squashed that thought as soon as it came to his mind. Or at least tried to. It was too late, the doubt had already germinated in him and he often found himself thinking about Yoochun's case.
*
Jaejoong was a mystery for Yoochun but it was part of his charm. Mysterious and dark, were the feelings he gave people but Yoochun liked to think that he was soft on the inside. After all, Jaejoong had taken in him after he had lost everything.
*
Yunho was worried about Changmin. Since Yoochun's incident, this one had taken the double of workload, as if helping all these persons would help Yoochun. Changmin dismissed his concern with a large smile and "what could happen to me anyway?" Yunho thought that, indeed, he was being stupid; they were angels after all.
*
Yoochun. One of his current target. There was nothing to worry about; the plan was going as smoothly as it possibly could. The poor guy was so sickingly naïve -- thinking he was nice -- but there was something about him he just couldn't put the finger on. But of what use would it be to discover it anyway? He just had to do his job. That was all.
Part of the
in_vazn's series: "Truth Hurts."The day he had realised that he would die, really die, he hadn't had the courage to confront Jaejoong. He had lied to him. He had been a coward and he still was as he tried to lie to himself this time. It didn't work and each time he saw Jaejoong, he wanted to hold him and never let go. When he finally loosened his grip from the fabric of Jaejoong's coat -- he was joking about Changmin behaving like a kid -- he felt the precious seconds separating him from death fly away.
"Are you all right?" Yunho had stayed behind and was now looking at him with a concerned expression on his face.
"Yeah," responded Changmin, looking away.
"That was a no in Changminnie's language." Yunho sat down next to the bed. "What's on your mind?"
Changmin stared at his blanket, letting his fingers play with the fabric.
The beginning of an au for
simp_anna. I don't even remember where I wanted to go with this one...0
Changmin's eyes had retained his tears when Yunho had told him about Yoochun's fate. For the first time in his long life, Changmin thought that God was unfair. But he squashed that thought as soon as it came to his mind. Or at least tried to. It was too late, the doubt had already germinated in him and he often found himself thinking about Yoochun's case.
*
Jaejoong was a mystery for Yoochun but it was part of his charm. Mysterious and dark, were the feelings he gave people but Yoochun liked to think that he was soft on the inside. After all, Jaejoong had taken in him after he had lost everything.
*
Yunho was worried about Changmin. Since Yoochun's incident, this one had taken the double of workload, as if helping all these persons would help Yoochun. Changmin dismissed his concern with a large smile and "what could happen to me anyway?" Yunho thought that, indeed, he was being stupid; they were angels after all.
*
Yoochun. One of his current target. There was nothing to worry about; the plan was going as smoothly as it possibly could. The poor guy was so sickingly naïve -- thinking he was nice -- but there was something about him he just couldn't put the finger on. But of what use would it be to discover it anyway? He just had to do his job. That was all.
no subject
And, maybe couldn't you mix both. Like Changmin is being used because in exchange they erased something from his memory (but not love in this case, something super serious? I don't know really but murder or something).
The first one may not necessarily be more mature than the second (though I see where you go with Charmed. xDDD I really liked Cole though... My teenage years!), it just depends on the way you write. The first could be written too romantically and sentimentally. You know, erasing a love that made him suffer (it really depends on why the love made him suffer).
Does this help at all? /fails...
no subject
yeah, i see what you mean about the 1st and the danger of too much romance and sentiments and blabla. that could be really bad in the end oo. i hadn't thought of mixing the two but that could be possible. idk, the problem with the 2nd one is that it's not well-thought yet, i only have little somethings here and there but that's not quite enough. i could use ideas from the 1st maybe, or just work hard on the 2nd only to make something complete and not too much Charmed-like lol. that's what i feat with this one although i know i could find a way to make it twisted and wicked just like i love it and i could be... not that bad? i mean, i guess.
... i think i need to sleep, i'm not being coherent anymore.
no subject
And do a long serious one and short cracky one...And do think about it and sleep. Let's talk another day. (I'm also going to sleep soon so tomorrow I can concentrate a lot.) Good night!
no subject
no subject
no subject
no subject
do you want me to login on messenger or are you sending it by mail?
no subject
no subject
no subject
no subject
no subject
it's really good. i love how you worked on the action, it's going fast but that's a good thing and you made a very good job on changmin's pov as it's easy to grasp his fear and surprise and everything. just a little something, maybe showing more shock when he realizes the man is yunho? or maybe you made it on purpose, it comes out a little as if he had been expecting it in a way? but that's the only thing. the writing is really good and omgomgomg the girl oo i was so surprised when he shot her, just like that omg oo that was awesome!
no subject
This is the first time I'm writing something with action (as you know I'm more of the fluff/angst kind, with lots of dialogues and small gestures). So yey if it flows well? Ok. Yeah, he'd probably be speechless and surprised (and more shocked) for more time than I made him to be. xDD This is "evil!not-yunho". :P (Changmin wants to smash his head against a wall to wake up, I think.)
no subject
no subject